Here is my attempt at the requested Poetry Thursday villanelle. Although I cheated on the last line! Only because it just seemed much better!
Costly
Your love is way too costly dear
Your love is way too costly dear
impulse, the subordinate corpse
in limbo, I amble, alone in fear
Nothing can change, if nothing changes
Nothing can change, if nothing changes
inadequate the tireless rearranges
Your love is way too costly dear
A course of words remain unspoken
Shirked the shambles of a promise broken
In limbo, I amble alone in fear
Looming defeat, goads vacant stare
Awaiting answers of savoir faire
Your love is way too costly dear
Alit and frantic I ponder solution
My mind swims a mire of delusion
In limbo I amble alone in fear
Astute senses emerge keener
Dolce ascends my false demeanor
Your love is way too costly dear
Culpable Conclusion, near, I fear
Your love is way too costly dear
A course of words remain unspoken
Shirked the shambles of a promise broken
In limbo, I amble alone in fear
Looming defeat, goads vacant stare
Awaiting answers of savoir faire
Your love is way too costly dear
Alit and frantic I ponder solution
My mind swims a mire of delusion
In limbo I amble alone in fear
Astute senses emerge keener
Dolce ascends my false demeanor
Your love is way too costly dear
Culpable Conclusion, near, I fear
6 comments:
Ohhh how wonderful!!!!!!! I REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY LOVE your mugs! WOO HOOOO! This one is fab!
*HUGS*
Giggles,
Good job!
At first it seemed too dauting, (writing a villanelle) but seemed to come together anyway.
This one works very well.
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Too many awesome lines to pick just one. You really rocked this form and made it your own. :) hug
Oops! Love your plates and mugs too!
Such a great poem - I definitely didn't write my villanelle correctly. Oh, well...Wonderful mug! xo
All rules are meant to be broken. Even in a villanelle. Love the last line!
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