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Thursday, April 26, 2007

Poetry Thursday "Costly"


Here is my attempt at the requested Poetry Thursday villanelle. Although I cheated on the last line! Only because it just seemed much better!


Costly

Your love is way too costly dear
impulse, the subordinate corpse
in limbo, I amble, alone in fear

Nothing can change, if nothing changes
inadequate the tireless rearranges
Your love is way too costly dear

A course of words remain unspoken
Shirked the shambles of a promise broken
In limbo, I amble alone in fear

Looming defeat, goads vacant stare
Awaiting answers of savoir faire
Your love is way too costly dear

Alit and frantic I ponder solution
My mind swims a mire of delusion
In limbo I amble alone in fear

Astute senses emerge keener
Dolce ascends my false demeanor
Your love is way too costly dear
Culpable Conclusion, near, I fear

6 comments:

Angela said...

Ohhh how wonderful!!!!!!! I REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY LOVE your mugs! WOO HOOOO! This one is fab!
*HUGS*

Remiman said...

Giggles,
Good job!
At first it seemed too dauting, (writing a villanelle) but seemed to come together anyway.
This one works very well.
rel

Tammy said...

Too many awesome lines to pick just one. You really rocked this form and made it your own. :) hug

Tammy said...

Oops! Love your plates and mugs too!

paris parfait said...

Such a great poem - I definitely didn't write my villanelle correctly. Oh, well...Wonderful mug! xo

twitches said...

All rules are meant to be broken. Even in a villanelle. Love the last line!

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